The charts give information about the proportions of boys and girls of a school who achieved high grades (A or B + ) in respective courses. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts give information about the proportions of boys and girls of a school who achieved high grades (A or B + ) in respective courses.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts show the changes in the percentages of
boys
and
girls
gaining impressive grades in different
subjects
in 1996 and 2000. Humanities saw the biggest increase in the
proportion
of high-achieving
boys
, with the figure nearly doubling to 43% or so.
By comparison
, the figure for
girls
dropped by 8% to 25%. Similar changes happened to the arts, in which the percentage of
boys
who gained high scores increased significantly to 21% and the figure for
girls
decreased slightly to 25%. Languages were another course which experienced a drop in the percentage of high-achieving
girls
, down to 31%, and the
proportion
of high-achievers for
boys
remained unchanged at about 21% in
this
course. There were similar patterns in the performance in science and maths for both genders. Around
one third
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of
boys
gained satisfying grades in these science courses
in
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1996-higher than the figures for other
subjects-but
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only around 18% and 17% reached
this
level in 2000.
In contrast
, the
proportion
of high-achieving
girls
in these two courses increased to 11% and 15% respectively,
although
these figures were still far lower than those for the other three
subjects
.
Overall
, there were clear gender differences in all these five
subjects
: science
subjects
saw an improvement in the performance of
girls
,
while
the arts and humanities had a higher
proportion
of high-performing
boys
. In 2000,
boys
outperformed
girls
in every subject except the arts.
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