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Plastic bags, plastic bottles and plastic packaging are bad for the environment. What damage does plastic do to the environment? What can be done by governments and individuals to solve this problem? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Plastic
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bags
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,
plastic
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 bottles and
plastic
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 packaging are causing tremendous damage to the
environment
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 nowadays.
This
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 essay will discuss the damages that are happening to our
environment
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due to
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plastics
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.
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 that it will discuss what are the actions that can be taken by the
government
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 or an individual to get rid of
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 problem.
Nowaday
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, the
usage
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 of
plastics
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 has
been
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enormously increased. As
plastics
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 are
non biodegradable
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 material, these cannot be broken down into small particles by the natural process
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like biodegradable waste material.
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 of
this
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, these
plastics
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 cannot be decomposed and will stay in
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their
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 own form forever. The survey which was taken on
plastics
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 says that
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 the
plastics
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 are permeated to almost sixty to seventy
percent
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 of the
earth
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earth's
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 surface.
Due to
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this
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, the survival of the plants and animals
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 been minimized. Let us consider in
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 of stray animals, they mainly search
their
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for their
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 food in the rubbish bins. As they don't know about the effects of
plastics
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, when they ingest them, these cannot be digested by their internal organs
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causing them to
death
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. Either a
government
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 or an individual can take any
necessay
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necessary
 action to reduce the
usage
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 of
plastics
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.
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plastic
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bags
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, the
bags
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 which are made of cotton materials can be used. The countries
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 as the United
Kindgom
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Kingdom
 and India
,
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 will be the best example for
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 scenario.The
government
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 of India have banned the
usgae
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usage
use
 of
plastic
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bags
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instead
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 they
enchouraged
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encouraged
encourage
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people to use
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bags
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 which are made up
clothes
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of clothes
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.
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, in the United
Kingdom
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 the majority of
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shopping
bags
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 are made up of
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biodegradable wastes, which will not cause any damage to the
environment
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. In conclusion, as
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plastics
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 are causing many
problem
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problems
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 in our
environment
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, the
usage
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 of
plastics
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 should be minimized. Reducing the
usage
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 of
plastics
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 is not only the job of the
government
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 but
also
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 an equal responsibility of an individual in
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society.

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coherence cohesion
For coherence and cohesion, making sure each paragraph smoothly transitions to the next can enhance the flow of your essay. Consider using clear linking phrases like 'Furthermore,' 'In addition to,' or 'Consequently' to make the connections between paragraphs more explicit.
task achievement
To improve task response, while your essay addresses the main points, integrating more specific examples or case studies, particularly in your solutions section, could strengthen your argument. This might include mentioning specific initiatives or programs that have successfully reduced plastic use or pollution.
logical structure
You have provided a clear structure to your essay, with a distinct introduction, body, and conclusion, which makes it easy for the reader to follow your argument.
complete response
Your essay directly addresses the question, providing a balanced discussion of both the problems caused by plastics and possible solutions.
relevant specific examples
The use of relevant examples, such as the policies in the United Kingdom and India, effectively supports your main points and brings your arguments to life.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • plastic pollution
  • ecosystems
  • wildlife
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • air pollution
  • strict regulations
  • plastic consumption
  • eco-friendly alternatives
  • sustainable packaging
  • recycling facilities
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