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task 1 The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

task 1 The bar chart below shows numbers of seals, whales and dolphins recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The bar chart provided
illustrate
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 the figures of
seals
, whales and
dolphins
 recorded in the Gormez Straits from 2006 to 2018.
Overall
, it can be seen that the
number
 of
dolphins
 and
seals
were
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was
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 at its highest during 2018.
However
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 the
number
 of
dolphins
 was at
it
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its
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 lowest during 2006. In
general
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general,
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 the
number
 of
seals
were
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was
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 more than the other two sea
creatiures
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creatures
. Regarding
seals
, during 2006 they reached
to
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a high
number
 which was around 42.
Then
 followed by a sharp decrease reaching approximately 25.
Then
 afterward it
countiues
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continues
 to rise in
number
 reaching
to
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a near
number
 from
were
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where
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 it
starded
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started
 in 2006.
Furthermore
, the
number
 of whales
,
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 showed a slight increase from 2006 to 2010,
then
 a slight decrease during the next four years.
Finally
, it rises again to almost 29. In
term
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terms
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 of
dolphins
, they started to show an upward trend, rising from around 18
reaching
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and reaching
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 32 from the period of 2010 until 2014.
And for
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For
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 the next four
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years
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year
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year,
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 it showed a significant
increse
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increase
 almost doubling the
number
 it
was
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in 2014 which was
aroun
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around
 52.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words seals, dolphins, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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