Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future, such as those related to science and technology. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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some disadvantages for
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the students who are following their dream may don`t
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continue their
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learn just some
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or major which have chossen. In some
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just some subjects for
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the thing which they want and they like it can be more productive than studying the thing which they have to. A lot of
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by some primary student and they were so keen on their future job and it was the deal for they wanted to grow to go to university. It is an
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I believe that the best way is
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them to education in their favourite major to have the most
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  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
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