In future all cars will be driverless cars, in your opinion are advantages outweigh disadvantages?

The line graph presents the amount of single-family homes
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built in the US by
region
from 2006 to 2012. There was a significant difference in the
number
of
houses
builtin
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each
region
. The highest
numbers
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number
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of
houses
in
Northeast
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the Northeast
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region
was built in 2006 it was 180.000, the same situation with
South
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the South
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,
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because the highest
number
of
houses
during
this
period was built in 2006 (900.000). Based on table data, since 2006, there has been an active decline in the construction of new
houses
. In the southern
region
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there has been a noticeable increase since 2010,
while
the northern
region
continues to decline. In
West
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the West
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region
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the
number
of
houses
started to grow,
while
in
Midwest
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region
the
amount
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of
houses
in 2010 and 2012
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the same(100.000). In
comparision
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comparison
the fewest hoses
built
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in the North
region
and the highest in the South. Most likely
this
was caused by the climatic conditions of the regions. In conclusion, we can say that most likely the
number
of
houses
in the southern
region
will continue to grow actively,
while
in the northern
region
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the situation will not improve and the
number
of
houses
will decrease
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Ensure to accurately interpret the task topic; the provided essay discusses a line graph analysis rather than giving an opinion on driverless cars. Clarifying and sticking to the task topic will significantly improve your score.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices and topic sentences to guide the reader through your argument or description effectively. Ensure paragraphs are well-structured and ideas logically flow from one to the next.
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Task Achievement
Provided specific examples and data from the graph to support the analysis.
Coherence & Cohesion
Logical progression of ideas from the introduction of data to the analysis and prediction of future trends.

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

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Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

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  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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