In future all cars will be driverless cars, in your opinion are advantages outweigh disadvantages?
The line graph presents the amount of single-family homes
were
built in the US by Unnecessary verb
apply
region
from 2006 to 2012. There was a significant difference in the number
of houses
builtin
each Correct your spelling
built in
region
. The highest numbers
of Fix the agreement mistake
number
houses
in Northeast
Correct article usage
the Northeast
region
was built in 2006 it was 180.000, the same situation with South
Correct article usage
the South
region
,
because the highest Remove the comma
apply
number
of houses
during this
period was built in 2006 (900.000). Based on table data, since 2006, there has been an active decline in the construction of new houses
. In the southern region
there has been a noticeable increase since 2010, Add a comma
region,
while
the northern region
continues to decline. In West
Correct article usage
the West
region
the Add a comma
region,
number
of houses
started to grow, while
in Midwest
Correct article usage
the Midwest
region
the amount
of Change the quantifier
number
houses
in 2010 and 2012 stay
the same(100.000). In Wrong verb form
stayed
comparision
the fewest hoses Correct your spelling
comparison
built
in the North Add a missing verb
were built
region
and the highest in the South. Most likely this
was caused by the climatic conditions of the regions.
In conclusion, we can say that most likely the number
of houses
in the southern region
will continue to grow actively, while
in the northern region
the situation will not improve and the Add a comma
region,
number
of houses
will decreaseSubmitted by viktoria.popova92 on
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Task Achievement
Ensure to accurately interpret the task topic; the provided essay discusses a line graph analysis rather than giving an opinion on driverless cars. Clarifying and sticking to the task topic will significantly improve your score.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a range of cohesive devices and topic sentences to guide the reader through your argument or description effectively. Ensure paragraphs are well-structured and ideas logically flow from one to the next.
Coherence & Cohesion
To enhance your essay, make sure your introduction clearly states what the essay will discuss, and your conclusion summarizes the key points effectively, tying back to the introduction if possible.
Task Achievement
Provided specific examples and data from the graph to support the analysis.
Coherence & Cohesion
Logical progression of ideas from the introduction of data to the analysis and prediction of future trends.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite