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Some people believe that professionals, such as doctors and engineer, should be required to work in the country where they did their training. Others believe they should be free to work in another country if they wish. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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People have different views about whether educated persons, mostly doctors and engineers, should work in the country where they have finished their education, or some
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 that, there should not be any limitation to force individuals to choose where to live. I strongly agree with the latter point of view. The forthcoming essay shall discuss
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both ideas and explain my opinion. There are some factors which support the idea
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 the country needs its educated generations.
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numerous sums of resources and money are allocated
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 universities, in order to train
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an intellectual investment for a country’s advancement, and
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immigrating
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educated person to foreign countries
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would be a waste of financial resources.
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 of responsibility to the nation where they have a chance to follow their
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 major, and their commitments are proved by serving that country with their knowledge.
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 that everyone
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 about their
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 must accept that
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 it is impossible to keep the work
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 by force, and it is on
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 to provide an atmosphere in order to support its educated citizens. It should be considered that
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 students sacrifice their youth to be a doctor,
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, so they should have the right to compare their job vacancies among different countries and choose the best option. In conclusion,
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educators must not immigrate overseas in order to work, I personally suppose that everyone should have the authority to decide about their
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Try to present more specific examples to support your arguments. This will make your essay stronger and more persuasive.
coherence cohesion
Work on the variety and complexity of your sentence structures to enhance the coherence of your essay.
coherence cohesion
Consider organizing your paragraphs more effectively by clearly separating points for a better logical flow.
coherence cohesion
Your essay provides a clear introduction and conclusion, outlining your overall viewpoint effectively.
task achievement
You've presented a balanced view by discussing both sides of the argument before stating your own opinion, which is excellent for task achievement.

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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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