The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.

The chart gives information on the percentage of women going into higher education in five countries for the years 1980 and 2015.
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The given bar chart provides information about comparisons among 5 countries in terms of the number of women who underwent a study in higher education throughout 35 years from 1980 to 2015. It is evident that in 1980, more than half of Australia's female population chose to seek higher education. The remaining nations, including the UK, the USA, and France, had less than 50%, with respective percentages of about 35%, 38%, and 49%. With only 15%, South
Korea
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has the lowest percentage. Thirty-five years later, the percentage of women going to higher education in all countries has increased to 50%, with the exception of South
Korea
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. Australia's percentage stayed the same
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the UK and
USA
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the USA
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experienced a 20
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increase,
France
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and France
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had a very slight increase.
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, the rate in South
Korea
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has increased to 30%. The fact that South
Korea
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has the lowest statistics out of all the included countries remains unchanged.
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