Some people spend most of their lives living close to where they were born. What might be the reasons for this? What are the advantages and disadvantages? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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The majority of
people
tend to live their lives nearer to the
place
where they were born and
bought
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up. The crucial reason for
this
is that they love the
neighborhood
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the most,
as well as
they don't want to move away from their relatives and friends.
This
essay will discuss what are the advantages of living near the
place
where they born. Followed by that it will discuss the disadvantages. Most
of
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the
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people
decide not to move far away from their hometown for their either occupation or education. Because of
this
decision, they live closer to their family and friends with whom they have
grow
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up
with
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.
Additionally
, they can be immediately available to them in case of any emergency. When a person thinks of starting a new business in the
town
or city where he
grown
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up, will have a good understanding of that
place
.
As a result
of
this
, he/she will have the
capabality
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capability
to
analyst
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and plan their
businesses
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business
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. My father
will
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the best example
for
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of
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this
scenario. He was grown in
the
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town
named Dharapuram in Tamil Nadu.
While
he was young he analysed that there were no pharmacies available in
this
town
and predicted it
will
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would
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be more profitable if he
open
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opened
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a
pharamacy
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pharmacy
. So he
decide
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to pursue his career in medicine and
then
opend
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opened
open
a pharmacy shop in that
town
.
As a result
, he earned a lot of money and his analysis turned
to
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out to
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be true.
On the other hand
, when a person
decide
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to
lives
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live
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near the
place
where he
born
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was born
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may not be able to explore new things and understand
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society.
The
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recent survey
tells
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that
,
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a person who moves away from his/her hometown for either study or work has a lot of Knowledge and skills when compared to those who live in
their
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same hometown. I will be the best example
for
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of
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this
, I
have
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born and
bought
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brought
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up in the
town
named Dharapuram which I mentioned earlier. When I was living there, I had a great
achedamic
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academic
knowledge but I lacked knowledge on how the
people
and culture varied from
town
to
town
or even country to country. I came to know that I
was lacking
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those skills only when moved out of
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the
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town
. In conclusion,
although
people
who
residing
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in
their
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the
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same home
town
have the ability to succeed in their
bussiness
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business
, they lack
in
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apply
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the
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a
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good understanding of
the
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apply
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society. '
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Coherence & Cohesion
Your essay presents a clear structure and flow, with logical paragraphs that explore both the advantages and disadvantages of the topic. To improve, ensure that your introduction and conclusion are more distinct and explicitly state your thesis and summarizing thoughts.
Task Achievement
You've done well to provide examples from personal experience to support your points. For a higher score, consider expanding on these with further details or additional examples to deepen the reader's understanding. Additionally, strive to directly address all parts of the task more explicitly throughout your essay for enhanced task achievement.
Content
Good use of personal examples to support your arguments, which makes your essay engaging and relatable.
Structure
Effective paragraph structure that maintains a logical flow throughout the essay, making your arguments easy to follow.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 250 words in writing task 2. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long essay will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 260 to 290 words in writing task 2. This will ensure a concise essay and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 40 minutes to write the essay and you need around 10 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long essay in 30 minutes.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Familiarity
  • Comfort
  • Social ties
  • Family ties
  • Belonging
  • Resources
  • Opportunities
  • Fear
  • Unknown
  • Financial constraints
  • Cultural attachment
  • Language barriers
  • Limited education
  • Skills
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