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The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asia countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below gives information about the percentages of the population in four Asia countries living in cities from 1970 to 2020, with predictions for 2030 and 2040. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph illustrates the approximate
precentage
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percentage
 of
urban
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the urban
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 population in Malaysia, Thailand, Indonesia, and the
Phillipines
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Philippines
 over a 50 years period with anticipated data for 2030 and 2040.
Overall
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, it can be seen that throughout the period all nations experienced an upward trend.
While
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 Malaysia had the largest population in cities, Thailand made the smallest proportion.
To begin
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 with, both the Philippines and Malaysia started with 30% in 1970. The Philippines underwent some fluctuation, from 30% to just under 50% in 1990 and a decrease to nearly 40% in 2010.
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, it is forecasted to reach around 55% of
population
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the population
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 in future.
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 contrast, the Philippines`s urban
inhabitats
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inhabitants
was
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 increasing by 10% each decade till 2010, and predicted to continue the grow. It is noticeable that Thailand and Indonesia had a
boradly
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broadly
 similar pattern. They
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 with almost 15% of citizens in 1970 and reached the same number in 2000, and
then
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 were followed by a gradual increase to 30% and 50% respectively.
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Vocabulary: The word "reach" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • graph
  • percentages
  • population
  • Asia
  • countries
  • urban population
  • China
  • India
  • Japan
  • Indonesia
  • increased
  • decreasing
  • projected
  • predicted
  • peaked
  • declining
  • steadily
  • rate of increase
  • comparisons
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