Reading is more important for devoloping imagination and language skills than television, Do you agree or disagree?

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Reading is
efficient
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an efficient
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method to build the imagination and
language
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skills
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rather than
television
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. In my opinion, I disagree with the notion that reading is
far
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a far
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better option than
television
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to increase the ability of imagination and linguistic
skills
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.
However
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,
television
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is
faster
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a faster
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and more effective method to develop these
skills
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.
The
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television
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provides
a direct information
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direct information
a piece of direct information
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through
the
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visuals and sound.
To begin
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with, most
of
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the
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people, students and learners use the
television
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method to enhance their visualisation power and
language
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skills
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by watching different types of content,
such
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as news, movies and shows in diverse
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language
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languages
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.
Therefore
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,
this
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way
viewer
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viewers
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can be able to understand, how the
language
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can
speak
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by hearing the pronunciation and sentence construction. Another point to consider is that
Television
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is faster than reading
technique
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techniques
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in terms of results.
In other words
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, in the book, writer can only explain their thoughts by word, which is quite
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time-consuming
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to understand, but on the
television
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,
person
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a person
the person
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can educate themself by just watching the visuals and
remember
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remembering
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them by actions quickly.
For example
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, small kids can learn the
alphabets
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alphabet
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and recognise them through pictures by watching
education
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shows. As a
results
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result
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, they remember the words more quickly and try to speak them by doing practice.
On the contrary
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, it is scientifically proven that reading habit improves the
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mind
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capacity and function power significantly, but it is time
taking
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process.
In addition
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, reading habit is likely to enable
person
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a person
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to acquire knowledge in vast
amount
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amounts
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and store
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it
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in the
mind
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for
longer
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a longer
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period.
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, many businessmen, public speakers, teachers, and entrepreneurs are known as great
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readers
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, because they improve their
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capacity by only reading a book. In conclusion,
although
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reading can increase the
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storage capacity and
helps
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help
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to use them appropriately, the
television
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can develop the imagination and
language
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skills
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faster way and
due to
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the animated Pictures and Sounds.
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Coherence and Cohesion
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Task Achievement
For higher scores in task achievement, ensuring that each paragraph delves deeper into analyzing the advantages of both reading and television could strengthen your argument.
General
Avoid general statements unless they're supported by specific examples or evidence to strengthen the reliability of your arguments.
Task Response
You have a clear thesis statement expressing disagreement with the notion that reading is superior to television for developing imagination and language skills, which is consistent throughout the essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
The essay demonstrates a good structure, with a clear introduction, body paragraphs for each point, and a conclusion, contributing to a logical flow of ideas.
Task Achievement
You provided relevant examples to support your arguments, like the use of television for improving visualization and language skills through diverse content, as well as citing the benefits of reading for mind capacity.
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