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the chart below shows the average cost of a monthly contract for different mobies( cell phones ) in a Eurioean country from january to september 2002,

the chart below shows the average cost of a monthly contract for different mobies( cell phones ) in a Eurioean country from january to september 2002,
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The line graph depicts the average monthly
cost
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 of mobile phone contracts for four providers in a European country during the first nine months of 2002.
Overall
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, there appears to be a trend of increasing costs across all providers with the exception of Sim TX. At the beginning of the
year
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, Domo was the most expensive provider, with a
cost
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 of €15 per
month
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. Their prices remained the highest throughout most of the
year
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, only dropping slightly in
September
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 to €23. Lex began the
year
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 at €12 per
month
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, but their prices
also
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 generally increased throughout the
year
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, reaching €18 by
September
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.
In contrast
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, Sim TX saw a decrease in monthly costs from €9 in January to €8 in
September
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. Alpha started the
year
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 at the lowest
cost
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, €5 per
month
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, but their prices fluctuated throughout the period. By
September
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, Alpha had become the most expensive provider at €25 per
month
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. In conclusion, the
cost
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 of mobile phone contracts in
this
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 European country appears to have increased in 2002, with the exception of Sim TX. Alpha showed the most significant fluctuation, starting as the cheapest but ending as the most expensive provider.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words cost, year, month, september with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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