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The map below shows a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The map below shows a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The change
of
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in
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 the school from 1985 to now is
showed
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shown
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 in two maps
Overall
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, the most striking change is that the bough of a 3
junction
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 which
connect
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connects
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 to the playground was removed.
Similarly
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, one of the
part
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parts
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 of
playing
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the playing
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fields
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field
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 was
flattend
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flattened
. Meanwhile, the car park which is surrounded by a 3
junction
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 and the office in the left-hand
corner
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 of parking zone
were
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was
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remainded
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remained
 unchanged.
Initially
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, one of the
branch
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branches
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 of the 3
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junction
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junctions
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 which
connect
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connects
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 to the playing areas was
destroy
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destroyed
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 to make way for the green.
Then
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, the
extant
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extent
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 of the road was rounded as a half
of
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apply
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circle which
link
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linked
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 the entrance and exit.
Additionally
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, the classroom block in
right-hand
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the right-hand
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corner
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 of
a
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the
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 school which
have
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has
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 2 floors, was updated to 3 floors. The car park and the classrooms in the right-hand
corner
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 of the library in 1985 were demolished and become
a blank areas
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a blank area
blank areas
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 until now.
However
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, the car park which is surrounded by the road and the office on the left-hand
corner
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 of
a
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the
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 campus
were
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have been
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 kept untouched until now. Moving
onto
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apply
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one of the
part
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parts
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 of playing fields which connect to the 3
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junction
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junctions
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 in 1985, was
flattend
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flattened
 to make room for two classrooms
which
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apply
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on the right and
left hand
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left-hand
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corner
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corners
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 respectively.
Besides
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, the swimming pool and fitness centre above a
claaassrooms
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classroom
classrooms
 which is on the bottom left-hand side
,
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apply
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 was added. The library in the left-hand
corner
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 in 1985 was
narrowd
Correct your spelling
narrow
 down and added the computer room. After the reconstruction, the limit of students was increased from 1500 to 2300 people.
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words junction, corner with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 5 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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