the maps below show the center of a small town called Islip 2010 to 2015

the maps below show the center of a small town called Islip 2010 to 2015
Contained in the given map are changes that happened in the central area of Islip town between 2010 and 2015. Generally speaking, the small town underwent many developments including more amenities and housing being built,
while
the alteration of
road
facilities
allowing
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a more effective transportation system.
Additionally
, the shopping area and the
park
were cut down in size, meanwhile the school remained intact. Beginning with the roads, the main
road
in 2010 was converted into a
road
for pedestrians,
while
the two side roads which led to the school and the
park
were extended and merged into a half-rectangular shape to the west of the old main
road
. Concurrently, a new
road
was constructed in the north of the main
road
, embracing part of the countryside and creating a half-oval shape. It can
also
be noted that there was an installation of a dual carriageway
along with
the new roads built during 5 years. Moving on to the facilities, the shops alongside the main
road
were knocked down to make room for the construction of a bus station, a shopping
center
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, a car
park
and new housing connected with an extended
road
of the existing one in the east of the map. Inside the half-rectangular shape, there was a newly-built housing estate added to the available ones. The final point of interest is the reduction in size of the
park
in the south-east.
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