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The maps show the changes of Bell Hill Farm in 1976 and 2006. (Bell Hill Farm in 1976-->Bill Hill Environmental Centre 2006) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The maps show the changes of Bell Hill Farm in 1976 and 2006. (Bell Hill Farm in 1976-->Bill Hill Environmental Centre 2006) Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The maps illustrate how Bell Hill Farm
has
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developed from 1976 to 2006.
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, the farming place has experienced some major changes in infrastructure throughout the period. As can be seen in 1976, to the Northwest of the city, there was a storage for farm machinery. to the East of the storage, there was a barn for cultivating
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 as corn.
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, there was a farmyard in the
center
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 of the map. To the South of the farmyard, there was
farmhouse
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a farmhouse
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, and to the East of the farmhouse, there were chickens and cow sheds. Turning to the map in 2006, the storage which was
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 the Northwest of the centre has been replaced by a parking area. A student housing has been opened up to the East of the map in place of
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 sheds and chickens. Another major change is a new recreation area in the
center
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 of the centre. To the northwest of the student housing, a multimedia room has been established as well.
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, the
farehouse
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farmhouse
firehouse
warehouse
 remained unchanged for 30 years.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 83%.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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