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The maps below compare 2 floor plans of one trade conference held in 2009 and 2010.

The maps below compare 2 floor plans of one trade conference held in 2009 and 2010.
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The maps provide information about the 2
floor
 plans
were
Correct pronoun usage
that were
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 compared between 2009 and 2010.
Overall
, what
stand
Wrong verb form
stood
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 out
from
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apply
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the most change
became
Verb problem
was
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 in the west and the east sides of the
floor
 plans, and a lot of seats
was
Correct subject-verb agreement
were
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 demolished. Looking to a detailed analysis,
main
Correct article usage
the main
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entrance
, registration and side
entrance
had
Verb problem
were
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 situated in the north of the
plan
 in 2009. In the west and
the
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apply
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southwest
part
Fix the agreement mistake
parts
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, there
had
Verb problem
was
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 been concert hall and meeting room which with including
stage
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a stage
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,
the
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apply
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seats and
display
Correct article usage
a display
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area
had
Unnecessary verb
apply
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been
Wrong verb form
were
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 extended
one
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to one
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 side of the
floor
plan
. The balcony and exhibition
area
 had been located in the southeast part of the
plan
. With regard to
current
Add an article
the current
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 layout, the main
entrance
 and side
entrance
were
Unnecessary verb
apply
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remained untouched,
whereas
 the registration was carried to the east, and it was replaced by
refreshment
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refreshments
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 in 2010. The meeting room and display
area
 were removed,
while
 the exhibition
area
 was larger and situated in the southwest corner. The number of seats was decreased, they and the stage were located in the concert hall, which
were
Change the verb form
was
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 next to the balcony
with
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apply
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including
Correct article usage
a lougue
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lougue
Correct your spelling
lounge
area
 in the southeast of the
floor
plan
.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words floor, entrance, plan, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "display" was used 2 times.
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