You recently bought a second-hand car from a company that sells used cars, but the car developed some problems. You have phoned, left messages and sent emails, but you have not heard anything from the company that sold you the car. Write a letter to the manager. In your letter explain the problems you have had in contacting the company, and explain your dissatisfaction describe the problems with the car tell the manager what you want him to do You should write at least 150 words.
Dear Sir or Madam,
I am Sarah, one of your customers. I am writing
this
letter regarding the dissatisfation
Correct your spelling
dissatisfaction
of
my previous purchase.
I Change preposition
with
have
purchased a Unnecessary verb
apply
second hand
Add a hyphen
second-hand
car
at your company on 5th
of March. It worked fine for a couple of Correct article usage
the 5th
week
after my purchase, Change to a plural noun
weeks
unfortunately
I am facing a few issues now. I have been Add a comma
unfortunately,
tring
to contact your office since Correct your spelling
trying
last
week but I haven't heared
back anything from your company. Correct your spelling
heard
This
disappointments me a lot.
I am facing problem
like Fix the agreement mistake
problems
leak
of petrol from its tank, the A/c system is working properly Correct article usage
a leak
additionally
, I cannot play any music in the car
. I have tried to fix this
issue with the help of local mechanics but it didn't worked
.
I would be gladChange the verb form
work
,
if you take any Remove the comma
apply
necessay
action Correct your spelling
necessary
on fixing
the issues with my Change preposition
to fix
car
. I can ride it to your company if you needed. Additionally
, I would like to let you know that I have a family function next and I am planning to take this
car
their
. So I would be glad if Replace the word
there
this
issue has been resolved promptly. I am looking forward to hearback
from you.
Yours faithfully,
Sarah.Correct your spelling
hear back
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Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure your letter is neatly organized. Keep each point in its paragraph to enhance clarity.
Language Usage
Review your spelling and grammar to avoid minor inaccuracies like 'heared' instead of 'heard', and 'necessay' instead of 'necessary'. These corrections will polish your writing.
Task Achievement
Include specific requests or desired outcomes to make your letter more assertive and clear, such as asking for a repair, replacement, or refund.
Coherence and Cohesion
You used a clear structure with an appropriate greeting and closing.
Task Achievement
You successfully communicated your dissatisfaction, the problems with the car, and a general request for action.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite