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The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table shows information about metro systems in six different cities. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
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The table provides some statistics regarding the underground systems,
such
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 as
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number
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the number
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 of
lines
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, total length,
number
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 of users and cost per ticket in six
location
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locations
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 worldwide.
Overall
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, the metro services are very different in each of the presented countries.
First,
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the
number
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 of
lines
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 varies from 24
at
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in
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 New York City to almost half
compare
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compared
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 to London , where infrastructure accounted for 11
lines
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 only.
In addition
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, the total length of the metro not
allways
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always
 has
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a colleration
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colleration
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collaboration
 with the
lines
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'
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number
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numbers
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.
For example
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, in New York and
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Beijing
Beijjing
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Beijjing,
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 the total durations are 659 and 357 miles,
however
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, the third place belongs to London, with the
smalles
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small
numbers
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number
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 of
rail's
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rail
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 tracks among presented regions,
accounted
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accounting
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 for 249 miles. . The next interesting fact is the
annual
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number of annual
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 journeys'
number
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, which is substantially higher in
two
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the two
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Asian's
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Asian
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 cities than in the rest of the areas.
Beijjing
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Beijing
 presents
the
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apply
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3.6 billion visitors, followed by Tokyo with 3.1 billion,
while
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 New York and Mexico
accounted
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account
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 for approximately
a
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apply
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half. In terms of cost per ticket, the most
expansive
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expensive
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 trip is in London, and it costs 7.3 USD,
whereas
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 the cheapest is in Mexico City, 0.23 USD only, which is thirty times less expensive.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, lines with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "presented" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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