Some people believe that teenagers should concentrate on all school subjects. Others believe that teenagers should focus on the subject that they are bet or that they find the most interesting. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

People have different views on whether focusing on only certain subjects
have
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positive or negative effects on
teenagers
. There are many benefits
in
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this
issue,
while
there are
also
drawbacks that we have to consider on
besides
as well.
This
essay will discuss
this
issue and suggest my view on the matter On the one hand, there are some grounds to support
this
view that youth have better to concentrate on the subjects that they feel excited
.
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To begin
with, when
teenagers
focus on specific studies they can prevent their interest in learning. In fact, if schools force all
materials
on
children
, many students would be uninteresting easily in their whole
study
.
For instance
,
this
phenomenon can lead to choosing
children
's major that they want to
study
at the university.
Therefore
,
teenagers
should be supported to
study
their interesting
materials
.
On the other hand
, others suggest that students should
study
all subjects.
Firstly
, each subject has a different lesson that students can acquire. In general,
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of education will bring
approach
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an approach
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that a variety of subject interests.
According to
some academic research, focusing on specific
materials
cannot develop
children
's knowledge of broad
study
.
Moreover
, as society has rapidly
transitioning
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to
modern
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the modern
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era, many companies require diverse
ablities
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abilities
for their work to young employees.
Hence
, learning all
materials
might be better to help
teenagaers
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teenagers
for future
occupation's
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quality. In conclusion, It is not
clear-cut
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a clear-cut
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issue.
However
, I am of the opinion that
teenagers
should
study
all
subject
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subjects
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. Despite of threat of tedious that
children
can get, it will bring better results to
children
for a long period.
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