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The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.

The charts below give information about the price of tickets on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne, Australia, over a two-week period in 2013.
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The charts delineate information about the
price
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 of
tickets
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 for both directions on one airline between Sydney and Melbourne which are 2 cities belonging to Australia, over the period of 2 weeks in 2013. Looking from an
overall
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 perspective,
it is clear that
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 the
price
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 of airline
tickets
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 at the weekend almost experienced a downward trend.
While
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 the
cost
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 of airfare on Monday and
Friday
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 was the highest, On
Tuesday
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, Wednesday and
Thursday
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 the
price
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 was the lowest. There was a dramatic decrease in the
price
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 of aeroplane
tickets
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 on Monday for Sydney to Melbourne flights, from 80
dollars
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 in
week
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 1 and fell to 50
dollars
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 in
week
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 2. From
Tuesday
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 to
Thursday
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, the
cost
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 of airfare stayed constant and went up considerably on
Friday
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 (beginning at 40
dollars
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 and ending at around 75
dollars
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). Over the weekend of 2 weeks, the
price
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 registered a downward trend (from about 70
dollars
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 to 50
dollars
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). In comparison with the money paid for aeroplane
tickets
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 of the reserve route on
week
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 1, which was 60
dollars
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, the
price
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 on Monday of
week
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 2 was significantly down to 40
dollars
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.
Whereas
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 the
cost
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 from
Tuesday
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 to
Thursday
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 remained steady (approximately 35
dollars
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), the
price
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 on
Friday
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 soared sharply and fell slightly on Saturday and Sunday in
week
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 1 (80
dollars
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 became 60
dollars
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) . In
week
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 2 the
cost
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 of flight
tickets
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 stayed stable on
Tuesday
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 to
Thursday
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 and grew gradually on
Friday
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 (from around 35
dollars
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 to 60
dollars
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).

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 79%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words price, tickets, cost, friday, tuesday, thursday, dollars, week with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "downward" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fell" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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