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The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip from 2010 to 2015.

The maps below show the center of a small town called Islip from 2010 to 2015.
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Contained in the two maps is information pertaining to changes that took place in the heart of the small village between 2010 and 2015. Generally speaking, a noticeable transformation has been made including the construction of new residential and commercial amenities.
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, transportation hubs have been modernized and added. Beginning with the north-western quadrant of the suburb, as far as shops alongside the main
road
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 were concerned, they were converted into a newly constructed shopping
center
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 located between a new bus station and car park.
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, the main
road
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 was relocated to make the semi-circular surrounding the newly developed zone. In the proximity of the car park, there was a new accommodation for residents at the north-easterly point of the map, leading to the erection of a small
road
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 connecting to the main street. Just between the remaining shops’ area and newly constructed land, a small street for only pedestrians was added. Moving to the south-eastern quarter of the town, the park was reduced to a smaller size to make way for the construction of the main
road
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 linking to the existing
road
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 on the other side, motivating the opening of a dual carriageway. Adjacent to the parking lot, a new residential zone was built,
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 the previous housing estate was relocated, alleviated in size, and separated by the new
road
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. In the most south-westerly point of the suburb, the school has been enlarged.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words road with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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