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The bar chart gives information about the life expectancy in Japan, Korea, the United States, and Indonesia, and the table shows the change in life expectancy between 1953 and 2008.

The bar chart gives information about the life expectancy in Japan, Korea, the United States, and Indonesia, and the table shows the change in life expectancy between 1953 and 2008.
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The bar chart compares the
life
expectancy
 of people who
was
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were
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 born in 2008, in four different countries.
However
, the table illustrates
alteration
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the alteration
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 in
life
expectancy
 from 1953 to 2008.
Overall
, the highest and lowest countries in
life
expectancy
 were Japan and Indonesia respectively, and the most remarkable change in
life
expectancy
 was in Indonesia with just under 16
years
 increase.
According to
 the column graph, the average number of expected
years
 to live was over 80
years
 in Japan, which was higher than other mentioned countries. Korea with almost 78
ears
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years
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 and
United
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the United
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 States with approximately 77
years
 came second and third in
life
expectancy
. The lowest
life
expectancy
 can be seen in Indonesia
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at
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 70
years
. Looking at the table, Japan and the USA underwent an almost similar change in
life
expectancy
 (around 3
years
). The expected living
years
 among Indonesian people grew dramatically by 15 over the period of 55
years
.
Additionally
, Korea with 12.5
years
growth
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of growth
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in
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apply
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was the second country that witnessed an increase in
life
expectancy
.
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