universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. To what eztent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that
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should accompany an equal
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ratio
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of male and female learners in every course. I
partial
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agree with
this
statement which I will explain in detail
further
. On the one hand, taking into consideration an equal amount of male and female
students
can help to decrease the partiality among the
students
.
For example
, If
their
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more
of
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boys
in the
enginnering
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engineering
class and less of
the
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girls
can create a lack of
confidnece
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confidence
among the
students
. It
also
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some point of gender discrimination illustrating that
boys
are more capable
for
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this
subject.
In addition
to
this
, it can
also
raise the
compitition
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competition
level among the
students
as
female
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females
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or
male
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males
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will not feel
themsleves
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themselves
to be lower
among
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each other.
Moreover
, the teacher will never point over the learning
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among the different
gender
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genders
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.
For instance
,
according to
the ratio ,
sometime
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the tutor
determine
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that
girls
are more intelligent
then
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than
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boys
to study for that particular
subjects
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subject
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.
On the other hand
, the ratio
among
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between
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the
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boys
and
girls
is not
also
important to maintain as it
depend
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upon the
students
their
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level of interest
for
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in
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that particular subject.
For example
,
mostly
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most
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girls
are found to be
intrested
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interested
in
the
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science subjects rather
then
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than
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a
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boys
who prefer to go with
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calculation.
Furthermore
, the outcome of the
particioation
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participation
for that particular subject does not relate
with
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the ratio of
students
, it
depend
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depends
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upon the
leaning
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learning
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skill of the
students
. In conclusion,
Although
the division of
students
should be done equally in every
subjects
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but is not mandatory as it
depend
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depends
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upon the interest of the individual too.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender diversity
  • innovative
  • comprehensive
  • bridge the gap
  • prevailent
  • STEM
  • meritocracy
  • undermine
  • qualification
  • inadvertently
  • reinforce
  • stereotypes
  • artificial
  • equality
  • access
  • opportunities
  • resources
  • quotas
  • root causes
  • societal norms
  • role models
  • disparities
  • inclusive
  • curriculum
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