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Populations in developing nations are rapidly growing, people now believe that we should turn to GM crops to increase the production of food grains. Discuss the Advantages and Disadvantages of this approach.

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In today's society, there is an increasing trend
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 population. Some
people
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 suggest that
GM
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crops
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is
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a
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 best method to increase
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food
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 grain productivity and promote the supply of
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food
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 market. Others argue that
GM
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crop
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crops
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 raise a
safety
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 concern. In
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benefit
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 and
drawback
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drawbacks
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 of
this
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technology
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. When it comes to the
food
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 supply,
GM
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crops
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 will not
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 by the physical environment and
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 ensure their
substainability
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sustainability
.
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, when the weather is unstable and extremely dry, it is impossible to farm
vegatables
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vegetables
,
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 as lettuce and tomato.
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, applying
GM
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technology
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 in farming
food
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 would not affect
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the
enviroment becuase
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environment because
 the
crops
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 are cultivated in the experimental room and their genes are strong enough to
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.
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, no matter how unsatisfactory the physical environment
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,
GM
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crops
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 would not be influenced, enabling the
food
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 supply.
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 the contrary,
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GM
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technology
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 raises public awareness
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food
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safety
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. Since
GM
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crops
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 have undergone different stages of genetic relocations and changes, it is concerning whether they are safe enough to be consumed by human beings.
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, when
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GM
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 tomato is created and cultivated, its nutrients may be lost during the cultivation stages.
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, since
GM
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crops
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are not grew
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natural environments,
people
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 cannot witness the process of production and
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 maintain
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suspectful
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respectful
suspect
 feelings towards them.
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, the
safety
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 concerns regarding
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GM
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crops
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 make
people
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 become reluctant to accept
this
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technology
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. In conclusion, it is undeniable that
GM
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technology
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 can increase the
food
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 supply and satisfy the
food
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 demands, but in the meanwhile, some
people
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concern
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 about the
food
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safety
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 of
GM
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crops
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. It is important to raise
public's
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the public's
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 understanding and awareness about
GM
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technology
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.
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic

IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.

Answer structure for the type of essay

  • Introduction
  • Body paragraph 1 – advantages
  • Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
  • Conclusion

Examples to start your body paragraph:

  • The main advantage is...
  • The disadvantage of this...
  • The main benefit...
  • Despite these advantages...
  • One possible drawback...

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