Foreign visitors should pay more than local visitors for cultural and historical attractions
Foreign visitors play a crucial role in the economic side of the
country
because they spend lots of money to buy and enjoy visiting different places
especially
cultural heritage Add the comma(s)
, especially
places
. Some people think they should pay more money as compare
to locals, Change the form of the verb
compared
while
they visit these Correct word choice
when
places
, but others do not agree with this
statement. I strongly disagree and will put my argument in the impending paragraphs.
To begin
with, the reason as
why tourists should not pay moreChange preposition
apply
,
is that they are not getting Remove the comma
apply
extra
facilities than locals. Correct word choice
more
As a result
, they would feel paying extra money is unfair to them. Although
, they like the place they will not visit that place and will not recommend to
others. Correct pronoun usage
it to
Therefore
, it will be big
economic loss for the Add an article
a big
country
.
Furthermore
, charging more for visiting heritage places
to overseas people makes them overwhelming. In other words
, they would feel ripped off and may not visit the historical places
. Resultantly, they will not learn your culture or may do
negative comments on social media, which can Verb problem
make
ruins
the Change the verb form
ruin
country
’s reputation on an international level. In addition
, if charging would be the same, more visitors would come to see the culture of the country
which would make big
jump in the economic growth of the Add an article
a big
country
.
To sum up
, it can be iterated that it should be the same pay rate for visiting heritage places
for both overseas tourists and locals not only because it is unfair but also
helps to increase visitors in the country
, which will help to boost the economic growth of the country
.Submitted by khushi8422 on
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Style
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Content
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Vocabulary
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