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in some countries,more and more are becoming interested in finding out the about the history of the house or building they live in What are the reason for this? How can people research this?

#countries #history #house #reason #people #research
People
 nowadays are eager
in learning
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 the past of the house or building they reside
.
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in.
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In
this
essay
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 we shall discuss the reason for the
people
's interest
to know
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in knowing
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 about the
history
 of the house or building and how they can achieve it.
To begin
 with,the reason for
people
's eagerness
in knowing
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 the good old days of the building
are
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is
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 fascinating, like how
people
's ancestors bought or constructed the building and in between the problems they faced.Sometimes knowing our
history
 helps to find a solution to modern issues.
People
 can get the name of the building and can confirm legally the building belongs to them or somebody else.
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instance
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 the flat my friend
has
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is
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residing
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to reside
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in belongs
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belongs
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in belongs
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 to his
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relative's
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relatives
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relative's
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 flat,he can't sell or alter the building on his own wish.
People
 can get information about
building
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the building
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 they stay,
by
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in by
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 assessing the
particularregion
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particular region
 of
Village
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the Village
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Admistartive
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Administrative
 Officer,the Officer have
the
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apply
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datailed
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detailed
 information
of
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about
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building
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the building
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 like who
constructed
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was constructed
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,when was it constructed,
at
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and at
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 present to whom the building belongs
to
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.Another way the
people
 get information about the building
through
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is through
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lawyer
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a lawyer
the lawyer
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.
For
instance
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 the building
my
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where my
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 brother
residing
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resides
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 was confirmed by the Village Administrative Officer.
Finally
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 I would suggest everyone
to
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know the
history
 of the building they were staying
,which
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in,which
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 might reduce the
consequence
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consequences
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 in future.'Knowing our
History
,
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apply
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 gives the solution to modern
issues'
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issues
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