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Today more and more people want things instantly (eg: goods, service, news). Why is this? Is it positive or negative development?

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In the cutting-edge society, there is a significant increase in individuals requiring various products, amenities and
information
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 immediately. It is caused by
ability
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the ability
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of accessing
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 to the
Internet
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. The writer has a propensity that
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 phenomenon has a huge disadvantageous effect of leading to
misunderstand
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 and overloaded news. It must be understood that the root of
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 development
come
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 from the revolution of the
Internet
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. It should be acknowledged that
IoT
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the IoT
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 era
leads
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 to
swift
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a swift
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 lifestyle
of
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 individuals in recent years.
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 is
due to
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 the fact that it is effortless for residents to search for
great
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a great
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 diversity of
information
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, services and commodities swiftly making it
turns
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 to their habits.
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 USA people tend to live
with
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high speed
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 life
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plethora
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a plethora
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 of breakthroughs
happened
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happening
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 on the
Internet
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 .
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 development is a consequence of overdevelopment on the social networking sites . It is interesting to note that immediately necessary requirements have a drawback of
misapprehend
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 and too much
information
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 is because
there
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 is not guaranteed that all of
news
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the news
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Internet
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are
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is
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 legit and authorized.
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complicated
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 situation
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that
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 people cannot control the amount and accuracy of reports. Taking Facebook platform , which contains both precious and fake news making misunderstand people’s
viewpoint
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viewpoints
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 on the
Internet
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 .
That is
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 the reason why it is adverse for people to get things instantly . In conclusion, the origin of the development is caused by social network revolutionizing.
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 , it
affect
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 adversely to people’s cognition of both
quantity
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the quantity
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 and quality of
information
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instant gratification
  • advent of technology
  • smartphones
  • internet
  • social media platforms
  • online shopping
  • fast-paced nature
  • modern life
  • immediate satisfaction
  • drive innovation
  • efficiency
  • streamlined
  • user-friendly
  • erosion of patience
  • impulsive buying
  • shallow consumption
  • interpersonal relationships
  • unrealistic standards
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