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some people think that eating meat is not healthy. To what extand do you agree or disagree?

#people #meat #extand
The consumption of
meat
 is considered
as
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a
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unhealthy to eat by people.
Although
meat
 may
consist
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 some harmful elements, I believe that there are
the
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advantages
of
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 eating
meat
 daily. A lot of people
hates
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from
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eating
meat
of
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 all
therefore
, may consist
harmful
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bacteries
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bacteria
 over the
few
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 years eating
meat
 has increasingly been associated with health risks like heart disease, certain cancers and
an
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early death. Things
gets
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 worse when we look at processed
meat
 through and during the process
meat
for example
, adding certain
chemical's
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chemicals
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 by curing, smoking, sorting on fermenting
in
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purpose
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 of making it delicious Bacon has a salome,
sausages
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 and not dogs
contains
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 chemicals...
hat
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 are harmful for us Each extra 50 grams a of processed
meat
 per dow increases risk of a by to percent 110 .
On the other hand
, biologically we need
to
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meat
 for several reasons like for energy, to acquire materials to fabricate our cells, and
also
 get special molecules that our bodies can not make themselves
Therefore
,
meat
 provides us
three
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macrountiients
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macronutrients
micronutrients
such
 as
,
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 fats, carbohydrates and proteins
Furthermore
, it contains all essential acids our body needs and a lot of minerals, Like: iron Fe, zinc Zn, and essential vitamins, some of like barely found in plants Vitamin B12.
Meat
 supports
pur
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our
 immune system
as well as
 the development of connective tissues.
For instance
, people who are suffering from
hedache
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headache
headaches
 or harmful
disorder
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they
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actually do not
consumes
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meat
. All things considered,
meat
 would have
different
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 impact on consumers.
Moreover
, eating in a balance may be beneficial
on
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 our well-being.
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