Write about the following topic: More children in developed countries are becoming overweight. This is a serious problem for wealthy countries. Discuss some causes and effects of this problem. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.

Nowadays, the number of

children

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who suffer from obesity

are

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increasing, particularly in rich nations. There are several reasons that lead to

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issue, and

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phenomenon will have

negative

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a negative

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impact on

children

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's health. The forthcoming essay shall discuss the causes and effects of

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problem. There are many factors which

are involve

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are involved

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in

children

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overweight.

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,

children

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, who are living in developed

country

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countries

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,

surely

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are surely

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surrounded

with

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by

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latest

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the latest

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technology that

force

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forces

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them to become less mobile. As they are sitting

infront

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in front

of

television

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the television

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and playing video games for hours.

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, their nutrition routines are so unhealthy,

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that the

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majority of youngsters consume lots of hidden saturated fat and

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sugar

suger

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sugar

in their meals and snacks.

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, in the past

children

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ate fruits and vegetables for their evening snacks,

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, today they tend to drink artificial orange juice

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of orange. The

children

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become

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becoming

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obese would have

number

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a number

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of

impact

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impacts

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on their

life

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lives

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.

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with, being excessively fat as a child might affect

on

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apply

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him

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or her heart function,

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the

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apply

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disease

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diseases

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such

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as

blood

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high blood

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pressure and

chlostrole

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cholesterol

might become an issue from early childhood. Apart from

phisycal

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physical

disorders, obesity will have

negative

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impact on their mental health and might lead them to isolation and depression. In conclusion,

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the excessive access to modern gadgets in the wealthy nations, the

children

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's activities decrease noticeably.

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lead

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leads

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them to face lots of

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physical

and mental problems. In my opinion, their parents should address some solution in order to solve the problem.