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Spoken communication is more powerful than written communication. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There is a controversial notion heating up a debate over whether communicating in speaking form is stronger than that in
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 of the most optimal forms of
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 in speeches whose purposes are inspiring or transferring insights. That might be because oral
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 greatly assists people in expressing their
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 and enables speakers to combine with their body
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while
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 talking, which makes the speeches become more and more intriguing so that they can successfully draw an appeal to listeners and gain the main purposes. To be more specific, Khanh Vy-
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 of the most talented and famous young people in learning languages and working as
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 MC, by using her potential in speaking in front of the public,
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has successfully transferred her ambition and experience to others with a myriad of videos on youtube or direct speeches.
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, speaking can be considered
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 of the most incredible modes of
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 the redeeming feature of spoken
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 is widely acknowledged, it is unfair that the written mode of
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 is ignored, especially in long insightful text. It is explicit to note that when expressed through pages, people can easily take note and infer the main ideas, which can
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 usefully memorized tool and avoid as much as possible the misunderstanding problems. To be particular, in the Vietnamese educational system, almost all subjects are imparted through pages
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 as history, literature or geography so that pupils can reveal their lesson and cram into knowledge more efficiently.
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, writing still has its power in some kinds of
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Introduce a variety of transitional phrases to increase the fluidity between ideas and paragraphs.
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Consider refining your essay by addressing potential counterarguments. This could deepen the analysis and provide a more comprehensive argument.
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Effective use of examples to support your points, such as Khanh Vy's impact in public speaking.
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Well-constructed introductory and concluding paragraphs that clearly state your position and summarize the main arguments.
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Clear and logical structure throughout the essay, facilitating easy understanding and making your arguments more convincing.

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