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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012 You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The line graph below shows changes in the amount of coffee exported from three countries between 2002 and 2012 You should write at least 150 words.
#minutes #line #changes #amount #coffee #three #countries
The provided line graph illustrates changes
about
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in
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 how much
coffee
exported
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was exported
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 from three different American countries over a decade. It can be clearly seen that
,
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there was an upward trend
for
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 the
amount
 of
coffee
which was
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that
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come
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came
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 out from Brazil and Costa Rica.
However
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 Colombia faced a rapid change over the period. In 2002,the average of
coffee
 which was sent out from Brazil was almost 11
kilograms
.
Following
this
 it experienced a moderate climb and peaked at 25
kilograms
 in 2012.(Which was the highest
amount
 over the period).surprisingly the
amount
 of
coffee
existed
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from
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 Costa Rica saw a modest
declie
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decline
 between 2002 and 2006.After
which
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this
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,
this
 product had a slight increase and reached
to
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20
kilograms
 in 2012. As regards how much
coffee
 was exported from Colombia,It
initiated
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began
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 at 5
kilograms
 in 2002.For the next four
years
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years,
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 the porporation of
coffee
 had a gradual climb and
then
 hit the bottom to approximately 3
kilograms
 in 2008.(Which was the least
amount
 over the whole year).For the following
of
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trend,It reached
to
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15
kilograms
 in 2012.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words coffee, amount, kilograms with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changes" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "climb" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
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