There is an increasing trend sround the world to have a small family rather than a large family. What are some of the advantages and disadvantages of having small families rather than a large family.

Some
people
think that
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family is better than
nuclear
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family.
Other
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side of
people
believe
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that
nuclear
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family has
a
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apply
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more
bemefits
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benefits
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tha
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the
big
one
. I choose
nuclear
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family because of some advantages
such
as
nuclear
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family
is
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more silent.
One
of the benefits of
big
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family is more interesting than
small
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a small
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family. It means that there is many
peopleand
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people and
they can chat a lot.
Also
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they can help each other to do
houseworks
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housework
. Grandparents can give
advices
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to their family members. And there
is
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also
disadvantages.
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of them
there
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has too
many
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noise and sometimes it is unpleasant. There
has
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a lot of
houseworks
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housework
because of many
people
. Nuclear
family's
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one
of the
benefit
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is more convenient than
big
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a big
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family. There
is
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parents,
one
or two children and so on. Some
people
think that
nuclear
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family is boring. But there
has
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less
houseworks
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housework
. In my opinion,
nuclear
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family is
good
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one
. I prefer
nuclear
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family. Because there
are
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more opportunity than big
one
.
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