The charts below show that percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients may be unhealthy if eaten too much. Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show that percentage of their daily intake of various nutrients the average person in the USA consumes in each meal and in snacks. These nutrients  may be unhealthy if eaten too much.

Summarie the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie charts compare the approximate number of nutrients per person each day in the United States.
Overall
, it can be seen that
sodium
and saturated fats were added in large portions to the dinner meals,
while
snacks
contain the highest percentage of
sugar
. Apparently, there are a lot of people
have
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health issues associated with a big consumption of
sodium
and saturated fat.
To begin
with,
sugar
made
19
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% of dinner composition,
whereas
the amount
sodium
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of sodium
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and saturated fats accounted for 43% and 37% per person respectively. 14% of
snacks
and breakfasts were sourced with
sodium
, and almost 30% of lunches included
this additives
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.
Similarly
, 26% of
luchs
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such
was saturated fats, with 21% and 16% of it in
snacks
and breakfasts respectively.
Regaring
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Regarding
the added
sugar
chart, in terms of the biggest consistency of harmful chemicals,
snacks
accounted for 42%,
while
only 16% of breakfast dishes contain
sugar
.
In addition
, dinners with added
sugar
were not rarely
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consumed by
the
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apply
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US citizens, it made
almost
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up almost
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a fifth of the chart.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.

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