Fast food is becoming one part of people's daily life everywhere and this has had negative effects on our lifestyles and diet.Do you agree with this statement?
Certain individuals believe that junk meals have caused deteriorating effects on
lifestyle
and diet of Correct article usage
the lifestyle
people
in the world. I overwhelmingly agree with it Use synonyms
however
it is not completely negative at all. It has a few benefits Linking Words
also
. In Linking Words
this
essay, the reasons behind the drawbacks will be discussed but with some positive outcomes too.
The reason why fast food has erupted Linking Words
criticism
is related to the Change preposition
in criticism
overall
impact on human health. Nowadays, ill-nutrition is more concerning Linking Words
due to
the spread of obesity owing to Linking Words
diet
higher in fats. Add an article
a diet
This
lifestyle disorder resulted Linking Words
into
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in
multitude
of maladies Add an article
a multitude
the multitude
such
as heart strokes and breathing problems. Linking Words
Thus
, premature deaths have reduced the lifespan of an individual. Linking Words
For instance
, research suggests that obesity is a contributing factor to heart attacks which Linking Words
occurs
Correct subject-verb agreement
occur
due to
the fat deposition in the blood vessels. Junk food is composed of fats only and no fibre which harms the health of an individual. Ergo, Linking Words
life
expectancy of a human has been Add an article
the life
reducing
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reduced
due to
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this
dietary change.
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On the contrary
, some advocates say that fast food is evolving the way Linking Words
people
think about cooking. Earlier, the working class had to waste time inside Use synonyms
kitchen
cooking meals and had less leisure time to spend with their families. Correct article usage
the kitchen
Although
, these days restaurants have reduced their pain by the introduction of newer ways Linking Words
such
as drive-thrus. To exemplify, many Linking Words
people
do not have to cook breakfast at home before leaving for their office and even do not have to stand in queues in Use synonyms
the
restaurants. They can pick Correct article usage
apply
their
orders quickly through drive-thrus. Change preposition
up their
Therefore
, somehow life has become easy for Linking Words
such
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kind
of Fix the agreement mistake
kinds
people
.
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To conclude
, there is no doubt that Linking Words
health
of an individual is Correct article usage
the health
afflicted
by the use of restaurant meals Verb problem
affected
however
it has some benefits Linking Words
also
. It has helped to save time for many Linking Words
people
. From my perspective, Use synonyms
junk
diet has somewhat benefitted Correct article usage
a junk
also
with Linking Words
overall
negative unhealthy lifestyle change.Linking Words
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task achievement
Your essay provides a clear response to the task, addressing both the negative and positive effects of fast food on lifestyle and diet. However, try to expand your examples and explanations to provide a more complete response.
coherence cohesion
The essay generally maintains a logical structure, but some transitions between ideas could be smoother. Ensure that each paragraph logically flows into the next.
introduction conclusion
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supported main points
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