Fast food is becoming one part of people's daily life everywhere and this has had negative effects on our lifestyles and diet.Do you agree with this statement?

Certain individuals believe that junk meals have caused deteriorating effects on
lifestyle
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the lifestyle
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and diet of
people
in the world. I overwhelmingly agree with it
however
it is not completely negative at all. It has a few benefits
also
. In
this
essay, the reasons behind the drawbacks will be discussed but with some positive outcomes too. The reason why fast food has erupted
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is related to the
overall
impact on human health. Nowadays, ill-nutrition is more concerning
due to
the spread of obesity owing to
diet
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a diet
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higher in fats.
This
lifestyle disorder resulted
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multitude
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of maladies
such
as heart strokes and breathing problems.
Thus
, premature deaths have reduced the lifespan of an individual.
For instance
, research suggests that obesity is a contributing factor to heart attacks which
occurs
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occur
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due to
the fat deposition in the blood vessels. Junk food is composed of fats only and no fibre which harms the health of an individual. Ergo,
life
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expectancy of a human has been
reducing
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due to
this
dietary change.
On the contrary
, some advocates say that fast food is evolving the way
people
think about cooking. Earlier, the working class had to waste time inside
kitchen
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cooking meals and had less leisure time to spend with their families.
Although
, these days restaurants have reduced their pain by the introduction of newer ways
such
as drive-thrus. To exemplify, many
people
do not have to cook breakfast at home before leaving for their office and even do not have to stand in queues in
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restaurants. They can pick
their
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up their
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orders quickly through drive-thrus.
Therefore
, somehow life has become easy for
such
kind
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kinds
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of
people
.
To conclude
, there is no doubt that
health
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the health
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of an individual is
afflicted
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affected
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by the use of restaurant meals
however
it has some benefits
also
. It has helped to save time for many
people
. From my perspective,
junk
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a junk
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diet has somewhat benefitted
also
with
overall
negative unhealthy lifestyle change.
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task achievement
Your essay provides a clear response to the task, addressing both the negative and positive effects of fast food on lifestyle and diet. However, try to expand your examples and explanations to provide a more complete response.
coherence cohesion
The essay generally maintains a logical structure, but some transitions between ideas could be smoother. Ensure that each paragraph logically flows into the next.
introduction conclusion
You have clearly stated your stance in the introduction and summary. This helps in orienting the reader.
supported main points
Your essay includes both sides of the argument, showing a balanced perspective.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • processed foods
  • nutrient deficiency
  • culinary practices
  • obesity
  • heart disease
  • diabetes
  • convenient
  • overconsumption
  • environmental impact
  • mental health
  • traditional diets
  • packaging waste
  • affordability
  • accessibility
  • balanced diet
  • health risks
  • eating habits
  • unhealthy fats
  • sugars
  • salt
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