The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The charts below show the changes in ownership of electrical appliances and amount of time spent doing housework in households in one country between 1920 and 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The charts illustrate the difference
of
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between
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households with electrical appliances and
number
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a number
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of
hours
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of housework per week from 1920 to 2019. There is a gradual trend in the percentage of households with electrical appliances,
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, the other
chart
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has a decreasing trend. An interesting thing is that in the first
chart
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, two categories achieve 100% in the end.
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, as long as the second
chart
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statred
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started
to
fell
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the first
chart
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began to
rose
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rise
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. Refrigerator quickly rose to 90% in 1960, before that it was at the bottom of the
chart
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in 1920, and it stayed at 100% from 1960 to 2019.
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vacuum cleaners
also
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stayed at 100% in 2000 and 2019, it gradually grew from 30%
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the beginning of
this
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period.
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, washing machines kept a steady growth in
this
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period, it started at 40% and increased to just above 70% in 2019. In the beginning, people
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spent
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50
hours
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per week doing housework, and
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sharply
drop
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dropped
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to 20
hours
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in 1960. After that, it slowly
decrease
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decreases
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to 10
hours
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in
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at
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the end of
this
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period.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words hours, chart with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 6 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "gradual" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • household appliances
  • time-efficient
  • labour-saving devices
  • technological innovations
  • ownership rate
  • housework chores
  • domestic workload
  • automation
  • advancements
  • trend analysis
  • societal shifts
  • economic impact
  • durability
  • lifespan of appliances
  • maintenance
  • historical comparison
  • time allocation
  • drudgery reduction
  • energy consumption
  • disruption in trends
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