The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph represents the proportion of crime
happen
in three disparate regions in New York Wrong verb form
that is happening
city center
over the Correct your spelling
City Center
period
ten
Change preposition
of ten
decade
starting between 2002 to 2012
As can be clearly seen from the graph the rate of car theft and robbery fluctuates moderately during the Fix the agreement mistake
decades
period
. While
the percentage of burglaries plunged significantly over time.
There was a drop considerable in the number of car thefts from 2800 to 2000 between 2003 and 2006. While
,
the rate of robbery increased steadily from 600 to 900 between 2003 and 2005. Remove the comma
apply
Then
this
data fell down slightly to 500 during the period
. This
figure was vary
around 500 to 700 until 2012. Change the verb form
was varied
By contrast
, the quantity of car theft jumped gradually o0ver
Correct your spelling
over
a-6-year
Correct article usage
a a-6-year
period
from 2006 to 2012 from 2000 to 2900
Opposition, the statistic of burglary rocket
substantially, peaking at around 3800 the following year. The proportion of burglary Wrong verb form
rocketed
decline
quickly over a Wrong verb form
declined
period
4
Change preposition
of 4
year
between 2004 and 2008 from 3800 to 1100. Over the 4 Fix the agreement mistake
years
year
after 2008, Change to a plural noun
years
this
data grew slowly during the given period
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