The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in New Port city center from 2003-2012.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph represents the proportion of crime
happen
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that is happening
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in three disparate regions in New York
city center
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City Center
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over the
period
ten
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of ten
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decade
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decades
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starting between 2002 to 2012 As can be clearly seen from the graph the rate of car theft and robbery fluctuates moderately during the
period
.
While
the percentage of burglaries plunged significantly over time. There was a drop considerable in the number of car thefts from 2800 to 2000 between 2003 and 2006.
While
,
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the rate of robbery increased steadily from 600 to 900 between 2003 and 2005.
Then
this
data fell down slightly to 500 during the
period
.
This
figure
was vary
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around 500 to 700 until 2012.
By contrast
, the quantity of car theft jumped gradually
o0ver
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over
a-6-year
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a a-6-year
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period
from 2006 to 2012 from 2000 to 2900 Opposition, the statistic of burglary
rocket
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rocketed
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substantially, peaking at around 3800 the following year. The proportion of burglary
decline
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declined
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quickly over a
period
4
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of 4
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year
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years
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between 2004 and 2008 from 3800 to 1100. Over the 4
year
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years
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after 2008,
this
data grew slowly during the given
period
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • instances of crime
  • significant decline
  • noticeable change
  • fluctuating trend
  • relatively stable
  • minor fluctuations
  • dramatic reduction
  • converged towards
  • crime rate
  • time frame
  • notable trajectory
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