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The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006.

The table shows the worldwide market share of the mobile phone market for manufactures in the years 2005 and 2006.
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The given table develops some information about the international market in mobile production in two years that`s 2005 and 2006. The biggest amount in both of these years was Nokia with 32.5
percent
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 in 2005 and 35
percent
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 in 2006. The
number
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 of worldwide mobile phone
sale
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in
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 Nokia company with less than one quarter was the hugest
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 in 2005 after that Motorola by 17.7
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percent
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per cent
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 was the second biggest among
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 the other companies were more than Motoral by almost fewer than 20 per cent.
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 Samsung sold more than 12% which can be in the bigger groups. Sony Ericsson and L.G amounts were
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also
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 the littlest
number
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 was for BenQ mobile with less than 5%. The amounts of sales in both of two company which are Nokia and Motorola increased
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by 35% and almost 21% in 2006, but the
number
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 of Samsung company sales decreased to 11.8
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.
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, Sony Ericsson and
L.G
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LG
 declined followed by 7.4% and 6.3% and, BenQ Mobiles
sale
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 dived by more than 2 per cent. The other companies
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 slid by 16.25.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words percent, number with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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