The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017

The graph below shows the number of tourists visting a particular caribbean island between 2010 and 2017
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graph
ilustrate
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illustrates
how many
number
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numbers
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of tourist
visted
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visited
a particular
island
in the
year
between 2010 to 2017.
Overall
, the total number of
visitors
where visiting the
caribbean
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Caribbean
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island
was more
then
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than
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1
million
in
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apply
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every
year
. The
visitors
satying
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sitting
on
cruise
ships
was
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were
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rough;y more than
the
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those
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staysing
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staying
on
island
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an island
the island
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in 2016 and 2017. The
visitors
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number of visitors
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stayed
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staying
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on
cruise
ship
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ships
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was less than 0.5
million
in 2010 and it starts fluctuated until 2013. After 2014, it started increasing to
1million
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1 million
and it
stayed
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growth
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as
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to
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0.3
million
in
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apply
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every
year
from 2014 to 2016. In 2017, it reached 2
milliom
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million
who
interested
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were interested
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to
saty
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stay
in
cruise
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a cruise
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ship
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ships
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.
Initally
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Initially
, the
vistors
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visitors
were
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showed high interest in staying on
island
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the island
an island
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with 0.8
million
in both
year
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years
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2010 and 2011.
then
it started highly increasing to 1.5
milli9on
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million
in 2013 and it stayed
plateau
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plateaued
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until 2015. after 2015, it again
fluctuates
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fluctuated
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and
visitors
staying on
island
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the island
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were less than
staying
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those staying
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on
cruise
ships. In total, people
were
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visted
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visited
more than 1
million
in every
year
.
Initially
, it was 1
million
and it
skyrocked
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skyrocketed
skyrocket
until 2015 and stayed
plateau
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plateaued
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for one
year
and
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apply
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again it started increasing to 3.5
million
in
year
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the year
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2017.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words island, year, visitors, million, cruise with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "plateau" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "stayed" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuated" was used 2 times.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • fluctuation
  • peak
  • trough
  • upward trend
  • downward trend
  • steady increase
  • sharp decline
  • seasonal variation
  • cruise ship visitors
  • island stay visitors
  • economic impact
  • environmental impact
  • tourism industry
  • sustainable tourism
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