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The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summarize the information and make comparison where relevant.

The chart below shows how frequently people in the USA ate at fast food restaurants between 2003 and 2013. summarize the information and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar chart illustrates how often
people
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 in the USA use fast
food
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 for their meals in three years: 2003, 2006 and 2013. The biggest amount in these three years
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 once a week and once or twice a month. The number of
people
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 who were eating fast
food
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 once a week and
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 once or twice a month in 2003 was almost 31% but
this
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 group in 2006 increased by approximately 33% and decreased by 27% in 2013. The other group which is once or twice a month were so close to the
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 one, in 2003 they were 30%
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 they divided by 25% in 2006, after that
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 group sharped by close to 35%. The number of
people
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 who ate fast
food
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 every day and never in these three years was less than 5 per cent.
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, the others that ate several times a week was less than 15% in 2003 and 2013;
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, these persons surged to 20 per cent in 2006. The range of
people
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 that were eating a few times a year was
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 15% in 2006 and 2013 but they were fewer than 15% in 2003. All in all the number of
people
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, was never ate fast
food
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 and ate every day was on the same level but
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 they were so less.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words people, food with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 3 times.
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