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In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying

#future #nobody #newspapers #books
Nowadays many
people
 are not showing interest
to
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 buying
newspapers
 and
books
whereas
 they can get
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them
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from
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online without paying.
however
, it will happen in future
also
. In my view, I will agree with the statement and the reasons are discussed in the upcoming paragraphs. One of the main reasons that
people
 are not interested in buying printed
newspapers
 or
books
because
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it
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they
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 can easily get
it
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them
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 from online websites and without paying
amount
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. It can
get
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 from
website
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the website
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at
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free of
cost
. The printed
newspapers
 or
books
 are not available
at
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free of
cost
 and we need to buy
it
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them
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 from any shops or stores by giving
certain
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 amount of money. In future, no one will buy the newspaper and
people
 will prefer to buy
at
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it
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 without spending
more
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many
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 on it.
for example
, Nowadays, many websites are available for accessing
the
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newspapers
 and
books
at
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free of
cost
 and we can search past
week
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week's
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 papers too. Another reason that reading
the
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books
 or
newspapers
in
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online is more useful
because
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is because
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 there is no wastage
comes
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that comes
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 from buying
books
 or papers.
People
 can buy
books
 from
the
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shops or stores and after reading the
books
,
it
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they
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 will not
useful
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for
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anymore. If
people
 read the content of the news or any book
in
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online, there will be no wastage of paper.
This
 can reduce the environmental issues.
For instance
, Many e-
books
 are available for
people
 and some
people
 are not interested in buying
books
 at shops. In conclusion, nobody will buy printed
newspapers
 or
books
 in future because many websites are offering
at
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free of
cost
 to read the content of the newspaper and
books
 without paying
high
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 amount. society
are
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is
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also
 growing towards the trend.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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