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The maps below show the changes of a school 1985 to present time.

The maps below show the changes of a school 1985 to present time.
#maps #show #changes #school #time
The maps provide information about how the
school
 developed
a
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period of 30 years.
Overall
, what stands from
out
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our
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 playing fields
has
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is
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 smaller and the center of the
school
 has bared between 1985 and now. Looking
to
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a
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the
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 details, the library, small car park and classrooms were situated in the west of the
school
. There were classroom
block
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blocks
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, which
with including
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included
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 two storeys
in
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 the east side of the
school
. In 1985,
bigger
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a bigger
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 car park, the office and playing fields were located in the north and the south part of the
school
 respectively. With regard to
current
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the current
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layout
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 the library has
demolished
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 to make way for
learning
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a learning
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 resources
center
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centre
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, which
is included
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includes
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computer
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a computer
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 room. In the southwest of playing fields
has
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are
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 smaller and
this
 part has
replacent
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been replaced
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by
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with
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pool
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a pool
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 and fitness
center
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centre
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. The number of classrooms has increased, and two areas of classrooms
have
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are
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 situated in the southeast and the southwest part of the
school
. The classroom block, the office and bigger car park have remained untouched,
whose
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and
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 there
was
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were
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 3 storeys in
this
 room.
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words school with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Layout
  • Significance
  • Accessibility
  • Expansion
  • Facilities
  • Trends
  • Priorities
  • Modernized
  • Well-being
  • Sustainability
  • Transportation
  • Innovative
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