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The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.

The two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
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The first map displays a layout of the
city
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 hospital in 2007,
while
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 the second map illustrates some changes in the same area in 2010. As can be seen, compared to 2007, the zone constructed different facilities
such
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 as a public
car
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park
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,
while
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 separating
car
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 parks for
public
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the public
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 and staff.
Additionally
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, new roads were introduced in 2010. Looking at the information in more detail in 2007, the layout of the
city
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 hospital is rather simple. There was a
car
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park
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 located to the east for employees and the public.
Moreover
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, it has only one main road, Hospital Rd, which leads to the
city
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 hospital to the north, alongside six
bus
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 stops. Moving on to the second map,
it is clear that
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 there are various changes shown.
For instance
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, it introduces a public
car
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park
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 to the east of the
city
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 hospital, and the staff
car
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park
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 remains in the same location.
Furthermore
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, the six
bus
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 stops become a
bus
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 station located to the west. The most significant change is the introduction of two roundabouts situated to the north of
City
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 Road, which connect with the
bus
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 station and
city
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 hospital.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words city, car, park, bus with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "map" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 3 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • dual carriageway
  • roundabout
  • traffic flow
  • multi-story car park
  • green spaces
  • pedestrian provisions
  • footpaths
  • traffic signals
  • construction phase
  • ambulances
  • carriageway expansion
  • traffic congestion
  • pedestrian crossings
  • urban planning
  • infrastructure development
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