The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting.

The graph below show the number of hours spent on social media per day from 2010to 2016 as well as the reasons why they used them.  Summarise the information by selecting and reporting.
The chart gives information about the total of hours that people spend on social media every day
in
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during
of
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the period between 2010 to 2016.
Overall
, the graph illustrated three different
type
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small
business
, medium
business
and the
last
one large
business
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happened
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in the years 2010 and 2016. Now, turning to the details, in 2016 the
rate's
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small
business
was the higher trend
to reached
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approximately 50 per cent
while
in 2012 was the lower number
it
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was
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nuder
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30 %. In 2016 The
figures's
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medium
business
increased slightly to reach above 50
percentage
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whereas
, the rate in the year 2015 and in the year 2012
are reach
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to
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30
percentage
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respectively.
However
in
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the
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large
business
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between 2012 and 2013 they made up
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level
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in addition
the highest number
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of
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spent on social media was in 2016
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reaching
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to reach
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nearly
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to
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80 proportion.
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