The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015.

The table below shows the percentage participation of women in senior management in three companies between 1975 and 2015.
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The table provides the proportion of women working as senior managers in three different companies namely, Eldan
Ltd
, Bamforth
Ltd
and Finsbury
Ltd
from 1975 to 2015.
Overall
,
although
to a different degree, all female workers experienced growth
at the end
of the period. Notably, Eldon Limited had the most increment
at the end
in contrast
to its initial value. Looking specifically at organisations which had no reduction over the years, Bamforth Lth saw a continuous rise from the beginning to the finish, starting from 9% in 1975, and
then
growing by 2% every 5 years till 2015 when it became more than double in 2000 percentage at 46%.
Similarly
, Eldon
Ltd
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female employees started rising from 1985,
that is
, between 1975 and 1980, it was 3% .
Nevertheless
, it rose significantly from 3% to 14% in 1985.
This
rate soared in every examined year by
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addition of approximately 14%, and just like Bamforth
Ltd
, Eldan
Ltd
witnessed the greatest jump to 64% accounting for the most prominent recruitment of all three industries. As for the only company which experienced a reduction, Finsbury Limited had an initial figure of 16%, which was reduced by 2% in 1980, from there, had a constant growth over the years amounting to an additional 10% of its initial number by 2015. Interestingly, Finsbury
Ltd
was hiring
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highest amount of women in the workforce in 1975 but took a reverse turn in 2015, where it resulted
to
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the lowest female recruiting company.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words ltd with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "reduction" was used 2 times.
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