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The table illustrates the projected costings during the five years in American dollars for three environmental strategies for stable forestry, whilst the pie chart presents the anticipated expenses distributed by four sectors in the first year.

The table illustrates the projected costings during the five years in American dollars for three environmental strategies for stable forestry, whilst the pie chart presents the anticipated expenses distributed by four sectors in the first year.
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The table compares the estimated cost for environmental strategies aimed at sustainable forestry in three distinct countries (West Africa, Central America, and South-East Asia), all
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measured in US dollars. Meanwhile, the pie chart illustrates the proportion of projected expenditure for anticipation
accross
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across
 four sectors (set-up cost, salaries, training and office expenses) in
Year
 1.
Overall
, South-East Asia indicates an upward trend,
while
 the others show
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 downward
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, with
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As
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 the highest money to fund those projects. Notably, it is projected that
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 cup's costs will dominate the expenditure in the time given.
According to
 the table, South Africa is projected to commence with US$ 30
million
,
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 a small downturn in
year
 2,
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 US$ 10
million
 in each
year
 for
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 3 and 4,
then
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hovered
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 around
at
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that level in the final
year
. West Amerika consistently marks as the least-cost from
the
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year
 1 to
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 5, with US$ 10.5
million
 to US$3.5
million
,
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 Central America begins at 20
million
,
fall
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 to 12
million
 and
level
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 off at 5
million
. The pie chart depicts the
set up
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 cost will consume 50% of the projected expenditure,
while
 salaries will use 30%.
Additionally
, both
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training and office similary will
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 10%.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words year, million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "set" was used 2 times.
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