It is generally believed that some people are born with certain talents, for instances for sport or music, and others are not. However, it is sometimes claimed that any child can be taught to become a good sports person or musician. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

The development of children depends on many factors including parents, school education,
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extra-curricular
training and so forth. Whether a successful
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athlete
or an
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artist
can be trained or they can only stand out from gifted people attracted a heated debate. I believe
talents
can be born with, but remarkable achievements are acquired from long-term
practice
. It is undeniable that some children who show their innate
skills
at a very early age
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as born with the gift and are more
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likely
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to become the top
talents
such
as a musician, an artist or a sports winner.
For example
, Chopin, by the age of seven,
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had begun giving public concerts.
As well as
what we see from nowadays Talent Show on TV, it is not
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to see young geniuses giving excellent performances with their special
talents
because natural ability paves the way to people's success.
However
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majority
of the elites gain their accomplishment through training, hard-working and dedication. To cite just one example, the famous young musician Langlang from China was considered "born to be a pianist" because he earned his fame at a very young age. To people's
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surprise
, he claimed in an interview that behind the stage, it was hours of
practice
every day since he was three years old.
Skills
can be taught, and without continuous consolidation, no one can master any
skills
, not even the talented ones,
instead
, the
talents
will fade
due to
lack of
practice
. When sports champions
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achieve
the golden medals, many of them will cry,
that is
because they know that without
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, tears, and training day after day,
this
will not happen.
To conclude
,
talents
can be born with, but
skills
and techniques can be taught and trained. Probably,
practice
does not make perfect, but it
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definitely
leads to improvement.
Talents
without
practice
will be wasted. To achieve success, no
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a musician or a sports player, 1
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inspiration and 99
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perspiration will be needed.
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  • innate talent
  • predisposition
  • genetics
  • psychology
  • natural abilities
  • disciplined practice
  • child prodigy
  • rigorous training
  • stimulating environment
  • nurturing talents
  • perseverance
  • dedicated effort
  • compensate
  • initial advantage
  • inherent ability
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