Do you have many books at home? How often do you read books? Do Vietnamese people like to read?

Yes, I'm an avid fan of
book
collections. I have a lot of types of books as science fiction
book
Fix the agreement mistake
books
show examples
,
cartoon
Fix the agreement mistake
cartoons
show examples
and romantic. I usually spend 2 hours
to read
Change the verb form
reading
show examples
book
Fix the agreement mistake
books
show examples
every weekend because it helps me to
open-minded
Add a missing verb
be open-minded
show examples
the knowledge and
relax
Wrong verb form
relaxed
show examples
by
Change preposition
with
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
humorous plots.
Book
also
brings many benefits for students like
boost
Wrong verb form
boosting
show examples
their
mind
Fix the agreement mistake
minds
show examples
and
strengthen
Wrong verb form
strengthening
show examples
their health. In my opinion, Vietnamese people are in favor of reading
book
Fix the agreement mistake
books
show examples
. They spend 2 to 3 hours
to read
Change the verb form
reading
show examples
Add an article
the book
a book
show examples
book
Fix the agreement mistake
books
show examples
when they go to the cafe shop or
hand
Correct your spelling
hang
show examples
out with their friends.
However
, recently
book
was transformed into
electrical
Add an article
the electrical
an electrical
show examples
book
so
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
that
Correct pronoun usage
apply
show examples
brings
Verb problem
making
show examples
more
Correct pronoun usage
it more
show examples
convenient for
reader
Fix the agreement mistake
readers
show examples
even release
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
eyes
Change the noun form
eye
show examples
diseases.
Submitted by chauhongngoc.577 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

coherence cohesion
Avoid repetition and ensure a varied sentence structure for a more engaging read. For instance, the phrase 'read book' is repeated multiple times and can be varied to 'reading' or 'perusing books'.
coherence cohesion
Include a more explicit introduction and conclusion. These elements help in providing a clear structure to your response. An introduction can outline your main points and a conclusion can summarize your thoughts.
task achievement
Showcase a broader range of vocabulary and synonyms. Words like 'open-minded' should be replaced with 'expand knowledge', and 'cartoon' should be 'comic books' for more variety.
coherence cohesion
Use more cohesive devices such as conjunctions and linking phrases (e.g., 'Furthermore', 'Moreover', 'However', etc.) to improve the flow between ideas.
task achievement
You have a clear and comprehensive response that touches on all parts of the question.
task achievement
The essay mentions specific examples, such as types of books you own and the benefits reading brings.
task achievement
Your reasons and examples—such as 'open-minded the knowledge' and 'relax by the humorous plots'—are generally clear and relevant.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

Discover more tips in The Ultimate Guide to Get a Target Band Score of 7+ »— a book that's free for 🚀 Premium users.

What to do next:
Look at other essays: