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Band 4

The diagram details the process of making smoked fish.

The diagram illustrates how smoked
fish
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 is produced, from the initial preparation stage to the packaging of the final
product
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.
Overall
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, the process consists of several stages, beginning with catching the
fish
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 and ending with delivering the finished
product
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 to the fishshop. it is
also
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 noticeable that the entire procedure is man-made, step by step production cycle.
Firstly
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, the
fish
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 is caught by using the fishing net and
then
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 they are loaded into a boat by people. The
fish
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 are brought to a port, where the main proceses are done, and keep in a freezer.
Furthermore
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, the
fish
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 is cleaned in fresh water before dividing. Afrer dividing, the
product
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 lay into salt water and yellow clolor is given to the
fish
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. Next the
product
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 is moved an other step which it is smoked. The end of these main proceses the smoked
fish
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 is packaged into a box, they
product
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 is saved in frezeer, with zero temperature.
Then
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 it is passed to cold store.
Finally
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 the finished
product
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 is loaded into a truct and sent to a
fish
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 shop.

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structure
Use a short start that says what the chart shows and a short end that sums up. Put all steps in clear order with one idea per line. Fix the many misspellings and keep the tense the same.
cohesion
Link ideas with simple words like And, Then, Next, Finally. Keep to small words and be clear about steps from first to last.
content
The text tries to show steps and uses a start and an end.
cohesion
It uses First, Next and Finally to show order.
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    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • selection
  • high-quality
  • cleaned
  • prepared
  • smoking
  • brined
  • saltwater solution
  • preserve
  • flavor
  • texture
  • air-dried
  • moisture
  • smoker
  • wood chips
  • hickory
  • mesquite
  • impart
  • cooked
  • temperature
  • monitored
  • cooled
  • packaged
  • delicacy
  • culinary dishes
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