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The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the number of shops that closed and number of new shops that opened in one country between 2011 and 2018. summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
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The line graph demonstrates how many
shops
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 have closed and opened their business in an unknown country between the years of 2011 to 2018.
Overall
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, the number of
shops
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 that closed in
this
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 7-year timespan has fallen drastically.
On the contrary
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, in the case of the openings, the
numbers
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 stayed moderately the same despite all the fluctuations experienced throughout the survey period. In 2011, around 8500
shops
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 had concluded their businesses which remains the highest record of closure in
this
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 7-year period which was followed by a dramatic fall into 4000
shops
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 after only one year. Afterwards, the
numbers
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 soared to over 6000 in 2014 which fell right back to 4000 by 2015. These closure schemes levelled out temporarily from 2015 to a year after which was immediately followed by a slight
raise
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 in
numbers
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. These closures reached the bottom in 2018 with only 3000 being closed.
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, with the starting point of 6500, opening
numbers
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 had minor fluctuations from 2011 to 2014 which
then
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 experienced a major downfall from 6500 to just a little above zero from 2014 to 2015.
However
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, openings started to increase by approximately 4500 in number by 2016, leaving it at 5000 opened
shops
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. Right
after
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this
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 increase,
numbers
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 slightly plateaued from 2016 until the end of the survey.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words shops, numbers with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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