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The diagram below shows how electricity is generated by using hot water from underground.

The diagram below shows how electricity is generated by using hot water from underground.
The
process
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 diagram illustrates
electricity
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the electricity
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 generation
process
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 by using underground hot water.
Overall
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, there is 1 vital source which is
high temperature
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high-temperature
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 liquid from underneath, 5steps and some equipment to derive
power
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 from underwater
source
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sources
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. The whole procedure starts
from
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with
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 pumping up aqua and finishes with sending electricity to
national
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the national
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 grid. The procedure starts with pumping up hot water into the heat exchanger through the pipes.
Following
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this
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, high temperature is extracted to run a
power
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 station where static is released. Ready
power
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 is delivered to people and their
necessity
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necessities
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.
This
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process
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 finishes when
reservoir
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the reservoir
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 is pumped back down after being used in the main equipment.
Moreover
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, there are layers
with
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of
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 hot rocks under the earth where
cold
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the cold
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 substance is warmed up again
while
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 passing through downside hot stones.
As a result
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,
this
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process
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 is continuous and can be repeated again and again in a cycle to manufacture
power
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source
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sources
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 from boiling natural fossil fuels.

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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 67%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words process, power with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 3 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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